Is my pen led astray?
Or just having its way?
two line strikes
and
those “rich green, carpet of flowing grasslands”
become
“verdant meadows”
Ideas morph in the margins
the chrysalis cracks
under the weight of my rolling, ballpoint pen
NOW
“the welcoming pale pink petals of my wax begonias that lure hummingbirds”
flutter away as
“blushing invitations to winged friends”
Arrows zing around my page
in colorful edits
this is war
in my mind
ten words drop in a single line:
“the furry, flop-eared bunny hopped, hid eggs and in the yard and, exhausted, dropped”
simply put:
“the rabbit died”
I’m not crying
rabbits
though cute
are ever multiplying
like words
before edits
they overrun the garden-page
NOW
weeded
hunted
tended
ideas flourish
under the cut of my striking pen
this is war
~
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“the rabbit died” hahaha
I love this!
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Lol…Thank you so much! I’ve been writing an adaptation of my old novel…
It was an honest statement.
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oh hey, that’s exciting, but I can imagine the editing process would be just like that, I love how you captured it lol.
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Thank you, again! It means a lot to me!
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My pleasure! I’m honoured it means a lot 🙂
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😊❤
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Reblogged this on The Militant Negro™.
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Thank you! I hope you are having a good Wednesday!
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For some reason I am very sleeeeeeeepppppy…..😴 😴
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I know you are “retired”, but I see how hard you work every day.😉😊
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I work more online after retirement than I ever did in 26 years as a chef. Thats mostly because the computer is always on and there ain’t no down time if I’m home. I have a nosy question…..if I may….how is it a woman with your “qualities” can not be somebodies wife? I hope this question is not crossing the line, which I’ve been known to do, often.
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No…it’s okay. For the sake of my children, I keep most “personal” stuff off the blog is all.
I hear you about the computer, my friend! We live in a 24 hour-a-day news cycle too, so there is always something, isn’t there? Especially now…crazy days!😊
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Crazy Times.😩 😫
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Completely!
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And it seems to be a war well-waged! So … “the rabbit died.” Aha! Love it … from beginning to end of your striking pen! 🙂
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Thank you so much, Jonathan! I’ve been adapting that old novel.
It’s an accurate description of the process…😊
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I’m sure it is, and all the best to you in striking, adaptation process. It’s sure to turn out well, as your talent dictates! 😉
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I’ll be sharing a few peeks at it next week. More than one rabbit died…Lol😊
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I look forward to those peeks! God bless! (And God bless the poor rabbits, too! 😀 )
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Lol…Many blessings your way, Jonathan!😊
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I LOVE THIS ONE!
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Thank you so much! It made me laugh. I’ve been adapting an old novel for republish. Those poor bunnies.😊
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Keep it up. Love your writing.
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Thank you, again! That means a lot to me! Have a wonderful day!😊
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A perceptive description of the composing process. Impressive, Tanya.
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Thank you so much! It is process of create/destroy/create. I’m thrilled that you liked it. Watch out for that dead rabbit..Lol
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❤
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Thank you!❤😊
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Thank you, Steve! The novel hasn’t complained, just the darn rabbits. I’ll be sharing the first four chapters next week.
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I love this a lot Tanya
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Thank you, Manuel! I’m preparing an adaptation of my old novel, so I’ve been striking a lot of words with the pen. It really is a complete re-write. I’ll post some of that next week.
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Ha Ha Ha! I love this! Humorous but true and your “Striking Pen” edits well! 😃
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Thank you so much, Leona! I try…Lol
Have a wonderful day!😊
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I hear you. Editing feels like a major battle at times: “Once more into the breach.”
*sigh* But it’s the only way I know to make my stories better. I’m gutting up for another edit of my first trilogy. It’s probably had enough time sitting fallow that I can productively work with it again.
Best wishes with the rewrite on your work. 🙂
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Best of luck to you, Cathleen! I think that “sitting fallow” allows time for grown. I know it did for me. The results are a series of books that are a huge step up from the original. 😊
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You’ve been on a roll. Wonderful. Keep going. So happy to know you and your work.
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Thank you so much! You are a dear friend, and I treasure our interactions. I wouldn’t be where I am at today with my writing without you.
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It is very nice of you to say that, Tanya. I have been an observer and have loved following you as you write. You have influenced me too, in so many ways, so that’s good too, and I thank you for that.
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We sharpen each other! Have a wonderful weekend, Roger. Wishing that warm weather your way!
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Thanks for the share!
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Thank you for the share!
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Yeah.whenever we r unable to write then feel dt d cut of our striking pen is as war against of our feelings,thoughts n imaginations.beutiful expression of struggling heart.
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Thank you, Aruna! I like the way you phrased that.😊❤
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Most welcome,dear!!💙
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😊
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I’ve been in this same place as well. This is so well explained, Tanya…
Steve
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Thank you, Steve! I appreciate that! Have a great weekend!
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